Tuesday - March 19, 2012

Class Work
1. Welcome back...the space is available in MyCompLab for you to post the final copy of your Body Art essay.
2. What can be compared and contrasted? Take two minutes and write down all you can think of. Work with a partner if you wish. Share and list on the board.
3. How does one go about comparing and contrasting in writing?

• Patterns of organization...point by point or item by item
• Let's compare shoes!
• http://images.search.yahoo.com/images/view;_ylt=A2KJkPsn7kdRHH8A4giJzbkF;_ylu=X3oDMTBlMTQ4cGxyBHNlYwNzcgRzbGsDaW1n?back=http%3A%2F%2Fimages.search.yahoo.com%2Fsearch%2Fimages%3F_adv_prop%3Dimage%26va%3Dcomparison%2Band%2Bcontrast%2Bpatterns%2Bof%2Borganization%26fr%3Dyfp-t-900-s%26tab%3Dorganic%26ri%3D1&w=621&h=499&imgurl=www.elcamino.edu%2Ffaculty%2Fbpeppard%2Fenglish-b-textbook%2Fcomparison_and_contrast.png&rurl=http%3A%2F%2Fwww.elcamino.edu%2Ffaculty%2Fbpeppard%2Fenglish-b-textbook%2FParagraph%2520Development.html&size=41+KB&name=Typical+transition+words+for+%3Cb%3Ecomparison%3C%2Fb%3E%2F%3Cb%3Econtrast+%3C%2Fb%3Eparagraphs+are+...&p=comparison+and+contrast+patterns+of+organization&oid=64f50bab35fdb29d5954867ae9476f2a&fr2=&fr=yfp-t-900-s&tt=Typical%2Btransition%2Bwords%2Bfor%2B%253Cb%253Ecomparison%253C%252Fb%253E%252F%253Cb%253Econtrast%2B%253C%252Fb%253Eparagraphs%2Bare%2B...&b=0&ni=21&no=1&ts=&tab=organic&sigr=12ofb3eqg&sigb=14gd6h6d4&sigi=12gu1jdoh&.crumb=Qa.3Zhxk5ME

4. Let's study some samples:

• Mall shopping vs. shopping in a downtown area

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/composition/comparison.htm

• "Neat People vs. Sloppy People" (Handout)
• www.iriscenter.com/tnm/Suina_essay.pdf "And Then I Went to School" by Joseph H. Sunia

Questions to consider:
A. Is there a thesis in this selection? What is the author's main point?
B. How do the children learn values in the Cochiti culture? How are values instilled in the white school Suina attended?
C. What patten of organization does the author use to compare the two methods of education?
D. Locate sensory details that are provided to compare the two cultures.
E. Did you notice any repetition? This is a writing technique that is sometimes used to highlight a point. It should be used sparingly.

Homework
1. Compare two web sites such as:

• Coke/Pepsi
• Niki/Converse
• Two sports teams
• Two candy companies
• Two car companies
• Two beauty products
• Etc.

Create a comparison/contrast chart. What will be the criteria? Which site is better?
Post your chart in MyCompLab. Use Word to create the "chart." Actual tables will not post to MyCompLab. No boxes are required. (35 points)

2. Think about what you would like to compare and contrast for this essay. Make a decision. Create a chart. This chart will serve as a guide for your research. Bring a paper copy of the chart to class on Thursday or be able to find it on a computer. (Jump drives or e-mail attachments should work fine.)

Happy Thursday!

Class Work

1. Please have a paper copy of your Body Art essay ready to share either electronically or on paper.
2. First, at your table, read your conclusion to the other students. Students, listen and decide if the message is clear. A good conclusion wraps things up or moves one to action. See pp. 425-426 in Write Now. Also see: http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/conclude.html
3. Provide praise and suggestions!

Pause...are there any questions about in-text citations? Here is a quick review: http://bcs.bedfordstmartins.com/resdoc5e/RES5e_ch08_s1-0001.html

4. Now, swap places with another student who is NOT at your table.
5. Read through the paper and look for the in-text citations. Highlight each. Look at the Works Cited page to see if you could find the entry. Also, make sure that the end punctuation for each in-text citation is OUTSIDE of the entry. Note changes that may be needed.
6. Comment on the content. Did the writer make a point? Was the message clear? Was a personal example included? Were enough experts cited? Did the writer help you to understand?

Homework: Polish, revise, and post the final copy of the Body Art essay in MyCompLab. Include the Works Cited page. (100 pts.) This is due before our next class on March 19th.

Now, let's just write.... This activity is designed to help you with fluency. Don't think too hard - just respond in writing.

If you missed class, send me an e-mail and I will send you the activity.

Tuesday

Class Work

1. Let's look at EasyBib and annotated bibliographies one more time.

www.easybib.com

Tips:
A. I asked for an annotated bibliography. That means that you write one or two sentences about each article read. On EasyBib, there is a place to do that. Let's find it.
B. Be sure you turn the document into a real Word document. There are two buttons that you must hit. Then you need to open Word. Your perfectly formatted Works Cited page will appear.
C. THEN, copy the entire document and paste it into the correct space in MyCompLab. The formatting should hold. Let's try!

More tips on annotated bibliographies:

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/614/02/

http://writingcenter.unc.edu/handouts/annotated-bibliographies/

http://writingcenter.unc.edu/handouts/annotated-bibliographies/mla-examples/


Write Now: pp. 371-373

Practice:  Add two additional sites to your Works Cited page. Annotate. Post in the Works Cited spot for homework in MyCompLab. I sent your pages back to you. You need to resubmit.

2. Summarizing, paraphrasing, and using quotations... see pp. 375-382 in Write Now. Pay attention to the rules for modifying and punctuating quotations.

Homework: Complete Exercises 1  and 2 on p. 381. Your topic of interest must deal with Body Art.

3. Learn to create in-text citations...pp. 384-386. Also see:

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/02/

http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/research/mlaparen.html

Here is a sample essay: pp. 394-399 in Write Now
AND

www.dianahacker.com/pdfs/hacker-Daly-MLA.pdf

4. The best way to get the hang of this is to give it a try. You have identified an audience who needs to know your opinion on body art. You have a personal story to include. You have located some excellent information about your topic. Now you need to write the draft for homework.

• Decide how to begin. By the end of the first paragraph, the reader should know your stance. You also need to capture the attention of the readers! You could use a quotation. You could tell your story. You could use numbers. It is possible to quote an expert! In short, make them want to read more.
• You are on your way. Decide what to discuss next. It is time for a quotation or summary or paraphrase from your research. CITE YOUR SOURCE with an in-text citation. For the next three paragraphs, try to include a quotation, summary, or paraphrase from your research.
• End the paper with power.
• Create a perfectly beautiful Works Cited page. Only include the sources you actually cited.

Bring a paper copy of the draft to class on Thursday or be able to pull it up on the computer. You can do this by saving to a jump-drive or sending an e-mail attachment to yourself. Your draft will be three-five pages.

Thursday

Class Work

Reminder...along with the answers to the questions from the Write Now book, this was the homework:
Write a body art memoir. This is a draft. Bring your draft to class on Thursday. Pay special attention to details aned sensory images. (Sight, sound, touch, taste, smell, and movement) Also, try to include some dialogue.

What's your story? It is time to share. Read your body art memoir to the others at your table. As you listen, note evidence of imagery. Also note if you hear dialogue. Each table will elect one reader to share with the class. (More may volunteer!)

Now let's talk about dialogue...

Look at:
http://fictionwriting.about.com/od/writingexercises/qt/punctuation.htm
http://www.be-a-better-writer.com/punctuate-dialogue.html

PP. 432-433 in Write Now

Check your Body Art memoir. Do you have dialogue? If so, is it enough? If not, how could you add dialogue?

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Moving along...
Audience and Persuasion

You will be writing a documented essay for a specific audience. You need to convince that audience that body art is a good idea, or that the audience ought to avoid extremes in body art. To be successful with this, you need to identify an audience.

A. Who would be interested in the topic?
B. Who needs to know?
C. What does the audience already know about the topic?
D. What is the age of your audience?
E. What other demographic information is important? (age, gender, income, education, area of the country, city or rural,                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                    religion, etc.) You decide.
F. Why does this audience need to read your message?
G. Be sure you are clear about your message. You are either "for" or "against" body art as is relates to your specific audience.

Who else uses audience? Think about advertisers. Find an ad in a magazine.   Identify
the target audience. How do you know? What are the clues? (Partner activity)


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Begin some research on Body Art. You know your point of view. Now, find experts to agree with you. Locate three articles. Post the Works Cited information in www.easybib.com  Watch and learn how to use the free site! Practice with me.

Homework

1. Write a one page description of your audience. This should be in paragraph, not list form. Post it in MyCompLab. Due: Tuesday, March 5. (25 pts.)

2. Revise your "Body Art" memoir. Add dialogue as needed. Post in MyCompLab. Due: Tuesday, March 5. (50 pts.)

3. Create an annotated bibliography of your three articles in EasyBib or other autocitation location. Copy and past into MyCompLab. (Due: Tuesday, March 5.) (15 pts.)

Class Work
1. Let's talk about "Under My Skin" (See questions from Thursday's post.)
2. Details, details, details...it's all about a rock.  Go outside and find a rock. Bring it to the room. (You will return the rock to its "home" after the activity.
3. List and answer the questions about your rock.
4. When you finish with the questions, you will have all of the information you need to write a descriptive paragraph or two about your rock. You need to describe your rock in such a way that other class members will be able to select your rock from the others just by reading your description.
5. For homework - revise your "rock" paragraph(s) and post in MyCompLab. (20 pts.) Due by 8:00 am on Thursday.
6. Let's look at some sample descriptive essays (handouts):
"Fish Cheeks" by Amy Tan
"Dawn Watch" by John Ciardi
7.  Think about an experience you had with body art. Maybe you got a tattoo. Maybe you pierced your ears. Perhaps you got a new hair cut or experimented with a unique color. You might have made an unusual fashion statement by wearing something unconventional. Whatever it was, you have a story to share.

Think about the people who are part of your story. Who are they? What did they say? (Dialogue will be very important!) How did they react?

Think about why you experimented with body art. Talk to the others at your table. Share your stories.

Homework

1. Read p. 123 in Write Now and learn the differences among the following terms"

• memoir
• episode
• narration
• truth value

2. Read the memoir on pp. 124-125 - "An Excerpt from an American Childhood"
Answer questions 1-4 on pp. 125-126. Post your answers in MyCompLab. (20 pts.)You do not need to type the questions, but you do need to answer in complete sentences. Due - Thursday by 8:00am.

3. Write a body art memoir. This is a draft. Bring your draft to class on Thursday. Pay special attention to details aned sensory images. (Sight, sound, touch, taste, smell, and movement) Also, try to include some dialogue.

Class Work

1. Let's look at the EMCC writing rubric and use it to peer edit today. (Handout)
2. You should have either a paper copy or electronic copy of your I Am A Writer introductory essay.  If you have an electronic copy, call it up on the computer. If you have a paper copy, make sure your name is on the paper. Leave it on the table. Now...trade places with someone in the room.

A. You will be reading the paper and noting on the rubric where you think the grade is at this moment. I suggest beginning with the "editing" section and the "mechanics" issues. That seems to jump out. Not to worry, it is an easy fix.

B. When you read the paper for "organization", be sure that the writer included the required parts of this paper:

The quotation

Reference to the picture

Personal example

Goals for this course

For "Language Issues", make sure that each sentence reads like a standard American English sentence.

C. Under "content", make sure that the writer provided details. If you have questions after reading, be sure to ask the writer.

Note: If you are reading on the computer, you can still make comments and marks on the draft. Just change the ink color or highlight.

3. Getting started with MyCompLab...you need your access code. You must use your own code. You may not share - sorry!

Here is the information you need to register for the class:

Your Course Name:	English 101 8:00 am
Your Course ID: eaton06259

Now that your are registered, you will find three assignments.

• One is just a "hello" space for you to let me know that you are registered for the course. The response is worth 5 points.
• The next "composing" space is for you to use to post the final copy of your I Am A Writer paper. It is due by the beginning of class on Tuesday.
• The third assignment is just a discussion thread. It is a space for you to discuss the body art with your classmates. You must post three times. (15 pts.) You will not see this on the list of assignments. You have to click on the "Discussion" button on the left.
• The last assignment is for your homework. A link to a reading, "Under My Skin" follows. Questions to answer are on the blog.  Answer the questions in the composing space. Be sure to hit the "submit" button.

This was the homework: Locate one article that discusses the history of body art. Be sure you can access it in class or bring a paper copy on Thursday. Let's have a discussion! Share your sources. Did you read from experts or from the average person?

Questions to consider:

• What
• Who
• When
• Where
• Why
• How

Read: Read the handout.  Make bulleted list of important or interesting information from the article. Do you agree or disagree with the messages in this article? Explain.

and

Read "Under My Skin" by Jon Bowen http://www.salon.com/1999/06/23/tattoo/

Answer the following questions for "Under My Skin." Be prepared to discuss in class.

1. How do the anecdotes about himself and his tattoo artist ("Flash Gordon") enrich this essay?

2. Bowen deliberately shifts from first person "I" to second person "you" as he describes the process of getting a tattoo and reconsidering the tattoo. Find three examples of the second person perspective as you evaluate this strategy.

3. Find three examples of Bowen's use of humor, catchy phrases or lively tone to keep this informative essay from becoming tedious or predictable.

4. The author uses allusions that may be familiar to many readers. Do you know the origin of "Flash Gordon", "tabula rasa" or "to undo or not to undo - that's the question?" How do references to familiar characters or phrases help or hinder an essay?

5. Evaluate Bowen's inclusion of direct quotations from tattoo technicians and medical specialists to describe the reasons for removal, the degree of pain, and the results. How does Bowen keep this research from making his essay too technical or inaccessible for the readers?

(Questions from Between Worlds pp. 32-33.)

Post your responses in MyCompLab.

First Class

Class Work

1. Getting to know you! Getting to know each other.
Find someone in the chass who shares the following:
A. Your favorite color
B. Has brothers
C. Has recently moved to Arizona (recent is a relative term)
D. Your birth month
E. Is a native of Arizona
F. Has sisters
G. Your favorite food or type of food
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Locate quotations about writing:
http://www.quotegarden.com/writing.html

http://www.quotationspage.com/subjects/writing/

http://thinkexist.com/quotations/writing/

Locate a quotation that sums up your personal opinion about writing. Be ready to explain your selection to the class. Why do you like the quotation? What experiences have you had as a writer that reflect the words you found? Why do you like or not like to write?
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Now, take your the camera on your phone or an actual camera, if you have one handy, and go for a five minute walk outside. Take a picture of something that is a reflection of you. You will use that in your introduction as well. If you do not have a camera, a sketch on notebook paper will be just fine. (This is not for an art grade!)

These activities will serve as pre-writing activities for a brief introductory essay.
For Thursday, write a one-two page paper of introduction. Include the the following:

• The quotation
• Reference to the picture
• Personal example
• Goals for this course

Bring a paper copy to class. This is a draft. Or, be sure you can access it on a computer. Bring it on a jump-drive or e-mail it to yourself as an attachment.
2. Syllabus - it is posted on the previous blog post. Scroll down!
3. Homework is posted in GREEN! Go and do it!

4. Be sure to purchase your copy of Write Now before Thursday. Again, you must have a new copy and your own access code. You may not share. All essays and many other assignments will be posted there. You cannot pass this class unless you post your work on-line.

5. What do you think about Body Art? (Discussion)
Homework: Locate one article that discusses the history of body art. Be sure you can access it in class or bring a paper copy on Thursday.
Questions to consider:

• Who
• What
• When
• Where
• Why
• How